The bar charts illustrate the activities that UK graduate and postgraduate student did instead of full-time work after learing college in 2008. Overall, the proportion between both types of the student is similar. Most of them studied further, while the rest of them worked voluntaraly. The most often picked option for students is to continue their studyings with the estimate amount of 29665 graduates and 2725 postgraduates. Second in popularity is a part-time work counting 17735 graduates while only 2535 postgraduates.

The bar charts illustrate the activities that UK graduate and postgraduate student did instead of full-time work after learing college in 2008.

Overall, the proportion between both types of the student is similar. Most of them studied further, while the rest of them worked voluntaraly.  

The most often picked option for students is to continue their studyings with the estimate amount of 29665 graduates and 2725 postgraduates. Second in popularity is a part-time work counting 17735 graduates while only 2535 postgraduates.
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The two bar charts illustrate the UK
students
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who went to full-time jobs as postgraduates and graduate
students
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in 2008.
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,
it is clear that
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going to
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apply
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further
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study was the optimal choice for undergraduates and postgraduates. Meanwhile,
students
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who did the voluntary work were the
least
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lowest
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. In the first graph, there were less than 30,000
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looking for better degrees in 2008, which is two times higher than the unemployment, at 16235. And
then
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, only 3500 people had the willingness to do the volunteering work.
This
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figure was far lower than the amounts of people in part-time jobs. In the second picture, a similar number can be seen for part-time work and
further
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study, with 2535 and 2735 respectively.
However
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, unemployment accounted for less than 1700. In the end, the smallest amount was the same as the first graph, it represented merely 345 people.
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