The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
The pie charts demonstrate the percentage of
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British pupils at a university, who are able to speak English,
other
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and other
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languages
like
Germn
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German
, French,
Spanish
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and Spanish
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over a ten-year span, from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, the number of students who can speak exclusively one language had reduced over the period, except for German.
On the other hand
, the population of pupils capable of talking in another language had increased slightly. In 2000, 30% of the
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population
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allotted to
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students, which is the majority of the the
chart
.
Following
this
, 20% of the students were merely aware of English.
Moreover
, French and
ather
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other
languages
were used with the equal
porportion
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proportion
of 15%.
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minority of the
chart
is related to German and two other
languages
(a tenth of the
chart
for each). Considering the data in 2010, Spanish remained the most popular language among the pupils, with a negligible 5% rise.
Similarly
, the popularity of other
languages
increased by 5%.
Additionally
, the
chart
is consists
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of four equal parts of 10% allocated to only English, German, French and the
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two other
languages
speakers.
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  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
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  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
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  • fluency
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  • language decline
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