The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
The surveys were done 2 times,
in
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the beginning of the first
decade
of
21st
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century and
at the end
of the
decade
. The
surveys result
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are grouped into 3 big categories:
students
who only speak
English
,
students
who speak
English
and 1 other
language
and
students
who speak
English
and 2 other
languages
. For the dual
language
category, it is
then
divided into several
second
languages
( other than
English
) list. These
second
languages
are German, French, Spanish and
another
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other languages
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language
( other than the previous ones).
Students
who speak dual
languages
represented the biggest proportion, constituting more than half of the total population both in 2000 and 2010. Spanish was the most spoken
second
language
in both years.
Students
who spoke only the
English
language
represented the
second
biggest
number
in 2000,
while
in 2010, they shared the same
number
people
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who
speak
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three
languages
. The
number
of
students
who speak
English
only
was
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decreased by half from 2000 to 2010. For the dual
language
category, French experienced a decline of 5% in a
decade
,
while
Spanish and other
languages
enjoyed an increase in the span of 10 years.
germany
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Germany
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remained unchanged throughout the
decade
. The
number
of
students
who speak three
languages
remained stable as well in both
survey
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. It can be concluded that more
students
were capable of speaking dual
languages
throughout the years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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