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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The line graph provides data about how many
books
 were borrowed
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from four libraries, over a four-month period from June to September 2014,
whereas
 the pie chart illustrates information about the proportions of
books
 which were borrowed. It can be seen that
while
 there was a fluctuation
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of
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 the number of borrowed
books
 in Sutton Wood before reaching the highest point in the final
months
 and crossing those in Ryeslip,
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 libraries increased slightly during the period of the
months
.
However
,Ryeslip was on the highest level
at
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 the first month,but it slightly decreased over the four
months
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 period. Looking into detail, as we can see
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 line graph, in June, Ryeslip had 300
books
, after which declined significantly to 170. West Eaton and Church Mount started at 50 and they
then
 increased slightly to 150 until September. As regards Sutton Wood, it fluctuated during all the
months
. If we look at the pie chart, fiction was in demand the most, at 43%. It is followed by biography with 19%, which was a fifth of the total amount. The percentages of science and history
books
 were the same (14%). The least popular type of book was self-help, accounting for 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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