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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The four diagrams represent
compares
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 of units of electricity production by
fuel
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source
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 in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, coal
by
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over
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this
Correct determiner usage
the
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twenty
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past twenty
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 years
,
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apply
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have
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has
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 become the main
fuel
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source
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 for electricity in
Australia
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. Meanwhile,
France
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leaved
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turned
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 to
the
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apply
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nuclear energy between 1980 and 2000. As is shown on the pie charts, coal and natural gas made up half of
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fuel
Correct article usage
the fuel
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source
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sources
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 in
France
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 and constituted seventy
percent
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per cent
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 of all energy production in
Australia
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 in 1980.
Furthermore
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,
Australia
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 did not use nuclear power in 1980.
Then
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, both of
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this
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these
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 countries gave away preferences for some
fuel
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source
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by
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for
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 twenty years.
Australia
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given
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has given
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precedencies
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precedence
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for
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to
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 coal and hydro power,
whereas
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,
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apply
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France
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used
Wrong verb form
uses
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 nuclear power
like
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as
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 the main
fuel
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source
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,
coal
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with coal
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 and oil equally. Total production in countries increased from
hundred
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one hundred
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 to one hundred and seventy in
Australia
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, and from ninety to one hundred and eighty in
France
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, source, australia, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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