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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The
pie
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chart
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 below illustrates how dangerous
waste
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products
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 are dealt with in two Europe countries and one Asia country.
According to
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pie
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the pie
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chart
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 majority proportion of underground
products
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 are
waste
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in comparison, with other Asia
country
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countries
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 Republic of Korea country were
pie
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chart
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show
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shows
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 almost
quarter
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a quarter
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 of underground production
were dealing
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deals
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 with
waste
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.
Furthermore
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, in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom incineration (
destroy
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destroying
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waste
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 by fire )
demonstrate
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demonstrated
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 only 2 %
while
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 in Sweden
in
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it
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 significantly upward to 20% percentage of incineration ,
whereas
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 in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea most percentage of
product
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products
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 with dealt is recycling which
show
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shown
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by
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apply
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according to
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pie
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the pie
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chart
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consist
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consists
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 sixty - nine percentage of it
by contrast
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, recycling
products
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 in Sweden is twenty- five
percent
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per cent
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while
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 in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
this
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 was replaced by chemical treatment with 8% and dumping at sea with 8% .
Overall
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, it is clear three different countries dealt with dangerous
waste
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 of
products
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 were managed
in
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apply
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rapidly
more
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with more
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 or less
efforts
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effort
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 putting in .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, waste, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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