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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed in four different months of 2014 from four rural libraries, and the pie
chart
 shows the percentage of books by type that were borrowed during that time. We can see the main general trends: down and up.West Eaton gradually increases from June (50) to September (one hundred and fifty), selling the same as Church Mount.
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,
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Leslie
 falls sharply from 300 to 200
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 the
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 fluctuates (from 250
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to 100
) and rises sharply(300)
Although
 book sciences buy up a larger proportion (49 per
cent
) than self-help help (ten per
cent
)
also
 we see that fiction and history buy up equally (fourteen per
cent
) but biology takes up not much space (nineteen per
cent
) from half of the
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. In the
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 book sales,
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we are shown for how many months certain books have sold out and
also
 the ups and downs in sales
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