Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change and developing countries. other believe that all countries should have the same responsibilties towards protectiong the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
argue that advanced
countries
have a higher
level
of responsibility to tackle
climate
change
development than developing
countries
, and other
believes
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that all
countries
have the same task to
respons
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respond
the
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environmental
issue
caused by
climate
change
. In my
opinion
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both
countries
have the same
level
to
taking
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take
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care
the
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of the
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environmental
issue
and solve the problem caused by
climate
change
in the
future
. On the one hand, the
super power
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superpower
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countries
have higher
level
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levels
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to protect the environment from
climate
change
issue
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issues
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. The
develop
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developed
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countries
spent more
their
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on their
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chance to earn
much
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apply
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money
by
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through
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industrial
process
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processes
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. How much
the
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deforestation the done to
built
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the giant
factory
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factories
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on the earth
.
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For instance
gold exploration in developing
countries
which cause
evironmental
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environmental
problem
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problems
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in the
future
.
However
, the developing
countries
earn
money
from
this
exploration that was given by the
develop
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countries
. It
was
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is
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not fair if we compare how much
money
the
develop
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countries
have been
earn
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earning
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today. The
develop
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countries
must pay more attention in terms of
money
, time and
people
to tackle the environmental
issue
. It is very reasonable because it
predicted
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by
the
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scientist
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scientists
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that
climate
change
will lead to food hunger, global warming and natural
disaster
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disasters
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in the
future
.
On the other hand
, All
countries
have the same task to save the
eart
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earth
from
climate
change
crisis.
The scientist
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has been
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reported since a years ago there are some causes of
climate
change
in the universe. The major problem was
accomodation
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accommodation
activity which
produce
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produced
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a toxic material called the greenhouse effect. It
is produce
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produces
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number
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a number
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of
gas
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gases
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which disturb the atmosphere and reduce the thickness of
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the ozon
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ozon
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ozone
layer. We can’t simply stop the
accomodation
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accommodation
process since all
people
use
it as the basic fundamental necessary.
For instance
, the transportation accommodation which
use
a
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petrol as their fuel. All
countries
have the same
level
to
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use
the transportation and most
people
spent
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most
use
the petrol
it-self
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itself
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. In
conclusssion
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conclusion
,
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even
the
develop
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developed
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countries
have
much
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a lot of
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money
and advanced technology to solve the
climate
change
issue
but
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apply
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I think all
people
have the same responsibility to keep the environment
and
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safe and
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tackle all the major problems of
climate
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the climate
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change
crisis in the
future
.
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logical structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should introduce the topic and clearly state your opinion. The body should contain distinct paragraphs for each point of view, and the conclusion should summarize your arguments and restate your opinion more decisively.
introduction conclusion present
Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction and topic sentences in each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument. Make sure your conclusion reflects on the points made in the body of your essay.
supported main points
Support your main points with relevant examples or evidence. The use of specific examples will strengthen your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
complete response
Make sure your response fully addresses all parts of the task. Your essay should discuss both views on the issue and provide your own opinion. Make it clear which side you agree with and back it up with reasons.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on presenting clear and comprehensive ideas by organizing them logically. Use connectors and transitional phrases to help the reader follow your reasoning.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate specific examples that are directly relevant to the topic. Examples should illustrate the points you are making in a concrete way, such as citing real-life incidents, factual information, or statistics that relate to climate change responsibilities.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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