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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map displays the two possible locations of
new
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a new
the new
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school
 in the
town
 of Canterbury.
Overall
, the first site is near to
countryside
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the countryside
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. Meanwhile, the second option is in the centre of the
town
. The two locations are
in
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on
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 the main road of the
town
 of Canterbury near
to
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two different cities. Looking
furher
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further
 into the details, the first location of the new
school
 is 5
kilometers
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kilometres
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 adjacent to Sturry, which has
population
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a population
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 of 7,000 citizens. There
are
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not
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no
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 housing near
to
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the first possible site of the
school
.
Furhermore
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Furthermore
, in the north of the
town
 the university is located. Meanwhile, the second possible site of the new building is in the middle of the
town
 without
no
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any
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 traffic .
This
 area is
alongside
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7
kilometers
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kilometres
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to
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from
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 Chartham, which has
population
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a population
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 of 4,500 people. The
further
 development of the
school
in
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is in
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 proximity to the neighbourhood.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • accessibility
  • proximity
  • town centre
  • site
  • amenities
  • proposed development
  • population distribution
  • environmental impact
  • traffic congestion
  • community needs
  • educational facilities
  • public transport
  • recreational areas
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