You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You pho0ned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ● explain what happened when you phoned the ● say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Sir, I have
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loyal customer
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your shop for years, and I never had any
issue
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until I bought a juicer from your shop
last
week. I used it once
then
it stopped working all of
sudden
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.
Moreover
, I tried to call customer service, but they could not solve the issue.
Thus
, I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to
this
issue. when I called at store, one of
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members picked
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call.
Then
, I was asked to identify the
modle
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model
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number and the brand of the juicer. I provided them with all
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details to verify the purchase. The technician suggested that it might be
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of excessive use and I should wait until it
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cool down.
Then
, he hung up on me, and the juicer
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still not working, yet. I would say that I am disappointed with the
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service
and I did not expect it. I want you to either send a mechanic to my house to fix it or I want a refund of my money. It is very important that it should be fixed as soon as possible because I need it every morning to prepare juice
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my breakfast. I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Kind Regards Yudhveer
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central theme and that the progression from one paragraph to the next is smooth and logical.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and expand on that idea with relevant details or examples for better clarity and impact.
task achievement
You have presented the main points of the task. To enhance the task response, provide more details about the equipment problem, share more specifics about the phone call, and clarify your desired outcome.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter as this demonstrates an understanding of the appropriate register for the task. Be careful with expressions that can be seen as informal or overly emotional.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • malfunctioning
  • defective
  • warranty
  • receipt
  • customer service
  • diagnose
  • troubleshooting
  • unsatisfactory
  • resolution
  • acknowledgement
  • immediate attention
  • inconvenience
  • appliance
  • follow-up
  • rectify
  • compensation
  • escalate
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