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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration below shows a
water
 treatment plant in an Australian city that filters and treats
rain
Correct your spelling
rainwater
show examples
water
 to make it drinking
water
.
Firstly
,
rain
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rainwater
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water
 is collected from the roofs of houses by a pipe that drains it to the main pipe which links all
the
Correct article usage
apply
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four houses. After collection, it passes through a
water
 filter used to remove all the impurities
such
 as dust and other waste products and
then
 goes to a large container
were
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where
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 it is stored before it reaches the
water
 treatment tank. From the storage place , filtered
water
 enters a narrow pipe and is collected in the treatment area which has bottles above the tank that release chemicals straight into the
water
. These chemicals kill bacteria or other microorganisms and
finally
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finally,
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it
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they
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passes
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pass
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 up to the tap
that is
 located on the bottom of the first house
were
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where
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 people can access it.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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