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You are going to move out of your apartment in a English-speaking country. Your landlord is a very good person, who has assisted you a lot during your stay. Meanwhile, your friend would like to rent the flat after you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, •Let your landlord know that you will be leaving •Thank you landlord for his/her help •Tel him/her about your friend

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Dear Sam, I am writing
this
 letter to show my gratitude towards you as you helped me a lot when I came to Canada. It has been two years since we
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 each other and we are no less than a family. I want to inform you
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 will move to Alberta for my PR process , as my study has
completed
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. I would like to thank you for
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 support and
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 will never forget how you showed me compassion and empathy during my struggle days when
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 did not have money to pay my rent and you gave me food to eat .
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, you have taught me enormous things
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 to survive in
this
 country. After me , my friend would like to reside in
this
 apartment . His name is Amrit
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 and he is
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 kind , generous and serene person . I
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 him since my childhood
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 he is like a brother to me . I assure you he will not give any chance to
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Harvinder
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task response
Ensure that you address all components of the prompt explicitly, and provide relevant details for each. Mention the specific reasons for leaving, the timeline, and perhaps invite the landlord to meet your friend.
task response
Adopt a more formal tone by avoiding casual language and using appropriate formal expressions. Address the landlord with appropriate titles and maintain a respectful distance in your language.
coherence and cohesion
Improve coherence by using a clear paragraph structure, with each paragraph centered around a single main idea. Use cohesive devices to link your ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
While the greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate, consider using a more formal sign-off like 'Yours sincerely,' if you know the landlord's name, or 'Yours truly,' if the name is not being used.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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