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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph highlights data about employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, over a ten-year period between 2000 and 2010.
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, what stands out from the graph is that There are upward trends in both self-employment and
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sector
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,
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 experienced a gradual decrease
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 the period. Another interesting fact is that
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the public
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sector
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 was the most popular one for many
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. Looking at the details, regarding
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sector
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, it started at approximately 38 per cent
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 and
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 remained stable for 2
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. Having increased rapidly to nearly %50 by 2005, it
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 saw fluctuation between %45 and %50 for the following four
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 it rose negligibly to just over %50. As regards self-employment, it began at around %18 and
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 rose to 20 per cent.
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 it decreased
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 but got recovered by 2005.
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it saw a rapid increase in four
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 to just %30 and remained stable until 2010. Looking at the private
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, it witnessed a gradual fall in the first three
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 to around %40 by 2003, which was the most popular one compared with others. After
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 it fell rapidly to just under %30 by 2008, after which it decreased dramatically to around %20 by 2010, which was the least-wanted
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