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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter describe the item explain where and when you left it say what action you would like the company to take

#item #value #train #railway #company #action
Dear Sir/Madam, I am
written
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writing
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this
 letter to file a complaint about my precious item that I lost on train boarding from Paris to London. Let me explain my situation more briefly, I was travelling for an important meeting on 15th December 2023 from the west Paris
station
 to Modern City
station
 in London. My train departed at 05hr30 in the evening. I was travelling with
one
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a
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 blue cat print laptop
bag
 and a small
hand
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handbag
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bag
. During the
journey
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journey,
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 I slept and when I reached the
station
 I mistakenly
forgot
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left
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 my laptop
bag
 under
the
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apply
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seat number B-045. Not only that
bag
 includes my laptop but
also
, some documents like my office ID card, cash
around
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of around
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 500 dollars and a picture of my grandfather. I would like to request you to please check underneath that seat or in lost and found
incase
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in case
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 somebody gave it to the
station
 officer. Hoping to get a reply as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Kat
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to structure your letter with clear paragraphs: one for introduction, one for description, one for explanation, and one for requested action.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'Therefore,' etc., to link your ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Always sign off a formal letter with a full name to ensure a complete closure.
task achievement
Respond to all parts of the prompt to ensure full task achievement - describe the item in more detail, like its brand, what kind of documents were there etc.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter; avoid using casual language.
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