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The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.

The charts gives information about the rate of electrical using for different purposes and how much time spent by the owner of houses in the year 1920 to 2019 in a country.
The line graph displays the use of electricity by house owners from 1920 to 2019, highlighting features
such
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 as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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.
Overall
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, the information in the line shows an increase in all features, being the use of
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 highest than the others and the washing machine kept a slight rise. In 1920, all categories rose, especially
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 with
a
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significant growth, which started in 1960 with a modest increase until
kept
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it remained
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 stable.
Also
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, vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 illustrated a dramatic peak as well, which stopped in 2000, since from that year the data
kept
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remained
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 the same.
however
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,
washing
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the washing
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machine
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machines
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,
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 had
a
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moderate growth, which started from 40 in 1920 and stopped
in
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at
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 70 in 1940, to make a slight decrease to later go up again and be over 70.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity consumption
  • Household activities
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Appliance usage
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Societal shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Historical data
  • Energy consumption patterns
  • Residential design
  • Electrical equipment
  • Time spent
  • Adoption
  • Correlation
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