The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The chart illustrates
the
how much free time Correct article usage
apply
utilised
by males and females of various employment Add a missing verb
was utilised
status
in a year period from 1998 to 1999.
Fix the agreement mistake
statuses
Overall
, men accounted for full-time employment, unemployment, and retirement more than women. Meanwhile, women took the entire part of part-time employment and become
housewives.Wrong verb form
became
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