The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

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The chart illustrates

the

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how much free time

utilised

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by males and females of various employment

status

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statuses

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in a year period from 1998 to 1999.

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, men accounted for full-time employment, unemployment, and retirement more than women. Meanwhile, women took the entire part of part-time employment and

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housewives.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

49 words

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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him which team won • Describe the weather conditions that day • Say how you felt about the match

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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone

International travelers can cause problems in the countries to which they travel. On the other hand, international travelers can bring real advantages with them. Do the problems international travelers cause greater than the advantages they bring?

Competitiveness is generally considered a good quality for people to have in society. Do you think it is a positive development or negative trend ? how does competitiveness affect individuals?