The graphs below show that post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55.
The pie charts illustrate degree holders who related to two
age
categories Use synonyms
whom
studied different fields in schools in Canada.
Change the pronoun
who
Overall
, most of the Canadians who are attributed to Linking Words
age
25-35, studied social Use synonyms
science
and Use synonyms
arts
at their schools Use synonyms
while
many natives who related to the Linking Words
age
category of 45 - 55 , learned social Use synonyms
science
and Use synonyms
arts
.
With regards to the Use synonyms
age
of 25 -35 , natives who learned social Use synonyms
science
and Use synonyms
arts
at 20%, followed by administration Use synonyms
19
%,Change preposition
at 19
science
, maths computers Use synonyms
18
% ,Change preposition
at 18
education
and engineering Correct word choice
and education
15
% and 9% respectively.Change preposition
at 15
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
who studied humanities and nursingUse synonyms
4
% and 7% respectively. MBA holders are 6% and 2% Add a missing verb
were 4
holds
other Correct subject-verb agreement
hold
qulaification
which is not surveyed.
Correct your spelling
qualification
qualifications
On the other hand
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
people
who Change preposition
for people
belongs
to the Change the verb form
belong
age
of 45-55 , 21% of Use synonyms
people
mastered social Use synonyms
science
and Use synonyms
arts
Use synonyms
whereas
19% and 15% of Linking Words
people
came from engineering and administration fields.Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it can be noticeable that a fourth Linking Words
related
to both education and nursing fields. Add a missing verb
is related
People
who followed Use synonyms
scienced
, maths,Correct your spelling
science
computers
at Correct word choice
and computers
10%.followed
by humanitiesCorrect your spelling
10 %.followed
5
%. When it comes to MBA holders and other Change preposition
at 5
qulaifications
, it seemed 3% each.Correct your spelling
qualifications
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