The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the work office of
Canadian
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Canadians
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for 5 different industries in
years
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the years
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1850 and 2020.
Overall
, in 2020,services
reaches
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reached
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81%,
compare
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compared
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to 1850 it was just 33%.
Also
,
agriculture
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in agriculture
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and fishing industries in 2020
it
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apply
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was just 1% same as energy and water in the same year. In 2020, manufacturing and
constructin
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construction
industries
was
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were
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between 8% to 9%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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