The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries

The table shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries
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The table illustrates the proportion of the females in the
labour
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force
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and females in the
management
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roles
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in the different countries which are Australia, Egypt, Sri Lanka, Japan and America.
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, most
women
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choose to work in the
labour
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force
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, especially in Japan.
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Japanese
women
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marked the higher rates with 48% in the
labour
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force
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but only 17% in the
management
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roles
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.
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,
women
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in Australia and America have similar
trend
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in the
labour
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force
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and
management
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roles
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with 42%,43%,46% and 43% , respectively. In Sri Lanka, only fewer
women
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works
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in
management
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roles
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with 9% shares but five times bigger the number in the
labour
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force
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with 42% shares.
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,
women
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in Egypt mostly stay at home as
a
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housewife
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housewives
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because of the culture that has influenced them over the centuries and only
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a fewer
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fewer
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of the
women
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are working in the
labour
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force
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and in
the
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management
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roles
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with 20% and 12% , respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words labour, force, management, roles, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Labor force
  • Management
  • Proportion
  • Gender gap
  • Leadership roles
  • Workforce participation
  • Variance
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Legal framework
  • Education
  • Maternity leave
  • Workplace discrimination
  • Career progression
  • Gender equality
  • Organizational policies
  • Case study
  • Representation
  • Strategies
  • Disparities
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