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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The picture illustrates the
different
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of
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in
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 the town of Stromer from 1995 to now.
Overall
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, the most significant changes in the map are Farmland and
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Forest
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Forests
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which
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whose
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 sizes got smaller
in
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apply
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now.
First,
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in 1955, there are two main
area
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 which are placing the most spot. One of them is the Farmland which is
placing
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 at the South. And
beside
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 to the left, roads are built.
Other
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The other
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 one is the
Forest
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 which
are
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is
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placing
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placed
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to
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on
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 the left side and the right side of the map.
Moreover
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, there are two Houses
between
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in
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 the
Forest
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.
Next,
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in the present, there are various places:
school
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schools
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,
airport
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airports
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, shops etc. In the middle of the map the shops
are covering
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cover
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school
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the school
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 and below it, three shops are built narrowly.
In addition
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, the airport is located
at
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 the North and it is located beside the
forest
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 and apartments.
Lastly
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, Farmland sized down significantly which is
placing
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placed
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 below the houses and there are 4 apartments beside the left.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words forest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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