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The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrations show the system of
water
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 supply in Australia at present and how it will be developed in the
future
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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storm
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stormwater
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water
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stream
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streams
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 towards the
river
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 at present;
however
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, it will flow towards
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water
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the water
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 treatment
plant
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plants
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 in the
future
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.
Additionally
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, pure
water
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 flows to the city from the dam's area now, but it is predicted to
flows
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flow
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 from two sources in the
future
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. By looking at the first chart, dams store pure
water
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, so it provide different parts of the city with it. After that, the wasted
water
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 streams to the treatment plant
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then
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and then
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 to the
river
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,
whereas
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 the
storm
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stormwater
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water
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 flows directly to the
river
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.
This
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 current system can harm the environment because of the wasted and stormed
water
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 that
go
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goes
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 toward the
river
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. In the
future
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, the
water
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 supply system is considered to be safe compared to the current one. There is no difference between the two systems in the first step;
therefore
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, the storage source provides the city with
the
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apply
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pure
water
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.
However
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, the stormed and wasted
water
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 will flow to the treatment plant, and come out in a pure
water
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 form.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, future, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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