The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustrations show the system of
water
supply in Australia at present and how it will be developed in the
future
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
storm
Correct your spelling
stormwater
show examples
water
stream
Fix the agreement mistake
streams
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towards the
river
at present;
however
, it will flow towards
water
Correct article usage
the water
show examples
treatment
plant
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plants
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in the
future
.
Additionally
, pure
water
flows to the city from the dam's area now, but it is predicted to
flows
Wrong verb form
flow
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from two sources in the
future
. By looking at the first chart, dams store pure
water
, so it provide different parts of the city with it. After that, the wasted
water
streams to the treatment plant
then
Correct word choice
and then
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to the
river
,
whereas
the
storm
Correct your spelling
stormwater
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water
flows directly to the
river
.
This
current system can harm the environment because of the wasted and stormed
water
that
go
Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
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toward the
river
. In the
future
, the
water
supply system is considered to be safe compared to the current one. There is no difference between the two systems in the first step;
therefore
, the storage source provides the city with
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
pure
water
.
However
, the stormed and wasted
water
will flow to the treatment plant, and come out in a pure
water
form.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, future, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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