People in senior management positions should have a higher salary than other workers in a company or an organization. Do you agree or disagree?

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Introduce the topic and your position in the introduction, provide detailed arguments and examples in the body paragraphs, and summarize your viewpoint in the conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a logical flow throughout the essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and the ideas should connect logically. Use cohesive devices such as conjunctions and transition words to improve the connection between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Address the task directly by stating clearly whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Then, support your position with specific reasons and examples. Avoid overly general statements or veering off-topic.
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Focus on grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Minor errors and limited vocabulary range can obscure understanding and reduce the effectiveness of your arguments.
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Practice writing essays on a variety of topics to improve your ability to generate relevant content and organize your thoughts cohesively. Consider seeking feedback from peers or instructors to identify areas for improvement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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