The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph illustrates the proportions of Australians maintaining physical exercise' based on diverse
age
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groups in 2010.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that
women
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were active in terms of doing physical activity,
whereas
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men
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showed less. The percentages of females were almost the highest compared with all groups, except the under-24-year-old youth percentage, where they attended more than females (47.7%), at 52.8%. The 45–54
age
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group of females peaked at 53.3%; that was its apex.
Women
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gained 52.5% in the 35–44
age
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group,
whereas
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men
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showed a 39.5% proportion in
this
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sector. The residents of Australia
also
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followed the same trend in the 25-34 and 55-64
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groups, where they acquired 42.2%, 45.1%, and 48.9%, respectively, for
men
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and
women
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. In the majority of the
age
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group, which was 65 and over,
men
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and
women
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were doing exercise almost the same, at 46.7% and 47.1% for male and female, respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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