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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts show the percentages of learners from the UK who speak
an other
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another
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 language than
English
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 in the years 2000 and 2010.
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, the proportion of individuals who can only speak
Spanish
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 was a major part in both years and showed
a
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growth in 2010. Students
that
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 can only speak one additional language as German and people who can speak more than one foreign
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language
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 remained the same and the proportion of people who only speak
English
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 increased. In 2000, students who spoke only a singular foreign tongue as
Spanish
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 was the majority with 30% and other tongues in
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 category were German at 10%, French at 15% and any tongue
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 the given ones at 15%. Multiple language speakers’ portion (
in addition
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) was 15% and 1 of the 5 persons did not speak any speech in 2000. With
Spanish
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 being the majority again, the category consisting of one overseas tongue speaker surged in 2010. In
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 class, only
Spanish
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 and unnamed ones showed a rise and French fell, all of them by 5%. Only German speakers and students who can speak multiple foreign tongues remained the same at 10%, and half of the population in the university who only spoke
English
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 decreased by half in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english, spanish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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