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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph shows data about population changes in
India
 and
China
 measured in
billions
Add the preposition
billions of
show examples
people
 over 50 years period between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, the number of
people
 in
China
 and
India
have
Change the verb form
has
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 grown from the starting points of the time presented in
chart
Add an article
the chart
a chart
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.
India
have
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has
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 a stable increase but
on the other hand
,
China
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China's
show examples
 population
is
Verb problem
has
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fluctuate
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
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 over the years. Looking in more detail, More than 1
billions
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billion
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 inhabitant live in
India
 and it gradually increase to approximately 1.6 billion in 2050.
However
,
China
have
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had
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 around 1.27
billions
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billion
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people
 in 2008 and reaching the top circa 2025. After that, the number of
people
 in
China
 plummed down to 1.4
billions
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billion
show examples
 in 2050. In conclusion, in the early
of
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apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
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time in the chart,
China
has
Wrong verb form
had
show examples
 more residents than
India
 but
India
 take the lead in 2050 because the number of persons living in
India
 is more than
China
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, billions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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