The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how many contributions of three sectors that are
agriculture
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, manufacturing, and
business
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and financial services to the
UK
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economic conditions from 1900 to 2000. Units are measured in per cent per area.
Overall
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, there are no sectors that have dominated the
economy
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over the
last
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20 years. The field of
agriculture
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in the
UK
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contributes the most in 1900 and 1950.
However
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, both in 1975 and 2000, the contribution of
this
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sector
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downfall to the lowest.
Besides
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that, the trend of the manufacturing
sector
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also
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shows deflation.
In contrast
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, the contribution of
business
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and the financial
sector
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constantly
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risen in two decades. Each year stated in the graph shows different sectors which have a large contribution to the
UK
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economy
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in the twentieth century. In 1990, the
agriculture
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field offered 50%
while
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the
business
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and financial area only contributed not even reaching 10%.
This
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agriculture
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sector
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hit it is the highest level in 1950. In 1975, the
sector
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which has the most benefaction to the
UK
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economy
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is the manufacturing (around 30-40%)
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this
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number is much smaller than in 1900 and in 1950.
Lastly
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, In 2000, the
sector
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dominating the
economy
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came from
business
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and financial achieving it is top at nearly 40%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, business, uk, economy, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Declining trend
  • Agrarian economy
  • Fluctuations
  • Industrial advancements
  • Recessions
  • Significant growth
  • Service-oriented industries
  • Dynamic economic structure
  • Traditional sectors
  • Modern service-based sectors
  • Urbanization
  • Technological advancements
  • Global market integrations
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