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You and some friends ate a meal at restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter Give details of your visit to the details Explain the reason for the celebration Say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to appreciate your
restaurant
 for its pleasant service and enjoyable food. I
was
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 thinking
to visit
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of visiting
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 your
restaurant
from
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for
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 a long time.
However
, I have an abundance of
problem
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problems
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 with my work and family. And, I
decided
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 go to the
restaurant
 with my friends. We celebrated Shayla's b-day. All
togethe
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together
.
we
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 were 5 people. Your
restaurant
 was so lively, you know. There
has
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 a vast amount of superb
singer
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singers
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 and lovely
dancer
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dancers
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. They were so awesome. When we were eating
main
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the main
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 course and gossiping
other
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about other
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 girls
that
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suddenly we heard Selena's delighted voice. We can't believe in our eyes. Selena is the best singer, I would say.
Moreover
, my best friend Shayla
also
 sang with Selena.
That
is
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was her dream. Umm, she achieved one of
the
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her best
dream
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 from my point of view. I think your place was out of
this
 world. There was plenty
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of foods
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foods
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food
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. I loved
dessert
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the dessert
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 Malabi.
This
 was enjoyable for me. I sincerely appreciate your service and
nice
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the nice
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 waitress. She was so
breathtaking
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a breathtaking
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 girl and so elated. I
also
thanks
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 her help. I'm thrilled to go
you
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to you
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on
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to
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restaurant
. I'm so glad for that. Soon, I'll come again with my family. Warm wishes Yours faithfully, Bayramoy
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task achievement
Focus on directly addressing each prompt point in separate paragraphs to ensure clarity and full task coverage.
suitable writing tone
Use formal language appropriate for a letter to a manager, avoiding overly casual phrases and ensuring correct grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
logical structure
Organize your letter logically with a clear introduction, body paragraphs each covering a specific point, and a conclusion to improve readability and effectiveness.
greeting and closing
Include a proper greeting (e.g., 'Dear Manager,') and closing ('Yours sincerely, [Your full name]') to adhere to letter-writing conventions.
single idea per paragraph
Dedicate each paragraph to a single idea, using transitions to link them for smoother progression and better understanding.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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