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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: give details of your visit to the restaurant explain the reason for the celebration say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my personal gratitude for
great
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the great
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 conveniences of your restaurant .
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, my parents and I have many choices for choosing
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place
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a place
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 to celebrate
special
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the special
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 day,
but
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I don't regret
spend
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 that time
in
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at
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 your
place
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. Actually, one of my
neighbors
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 suggested that choice of
natural
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a natural
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place
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 for
celebrity
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a celebrity
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. After that , I started to look for
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 which is located in a central part of the
breath- taking
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breathtaking
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 scenery. At
last
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, I
have
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found one restaurant
by
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through
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 online
advertise
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 and
this
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place
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 was suitable for my demand.
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, that holiday was very important for me , because I invited some of my old friends from other
country
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countries
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 and I didn't want any problems or shortages. At
first,
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I was wondering
to
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how to
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 find a delicious cake for my seventh birthday party, too.
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, your main assistant offered some cakes and sweets from your new cake shop. And it was a big surprise for me. Especially , my friends were so excited for spent their time in an attractive
place
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. Everyone was satisfied with new recipes and tasty meals.
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, your waiters were hardworking and talented. Because I have never seen service
such
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 as that day. I appreciate having the opportunity to contact
with
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you about your best business. And thank you for everything!
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Nozigul

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Greeting and tone
Ensure your introduction clearly sets the tone and reason for the letter. Using a direct and personalized greeting, such as 'Dear [Restaurant Manager's Name],' can make your letter feel more genuine.
Detail and specificity
When describing your visit and the reason for celebration, provide specific details about the date, the occasion, and the names of dishes or services you particularly enjoyed. This enriches the reader's understanding and connection to your experience.
Structure and organization
Try to organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each with a single focus. For instance, one paragraph for the introduction and thanks, one for detailing the visit, one for explaining the celebration, and one for praising the food and service.
Clarity and precision
Avoid generic phrases and aim for more precise descriptions of your experience. Instead of saying 'great conveniences' or 'attractive place,' describe what made the place special for you. This adds personal touch and specificity.
Grammar and accuracy
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and aim to correct these for a more polished and professional letter. Pay special attention to subject-verb agreement, proper use of articles ('a', 'an', 'the'), and consistent tense usage.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • outstanding
  • exquisite
  • impeccable
  • flawless
  • attentive
  • accommodating
  • courteous
  • prompt
  • delicious
  • mouthwatering
  • satisfying
  • memorable
  • thank
  • impressed
  • appreciate
  • grateful
  • recommend
  • celebration
  • occasional
  • special
  • occasion
  • stellar
  • exceptional
  • commend
  • commendable
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