The line graph shows the growth in the population of UK from 1971 to 2006 and projections until 2031. The pie chart shows the population of different nationalities in the UK in the year 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the growth in the population of UK from 1971 to 2006 and projections until 2031. The pie chart shows the population of different nationalities in the UK in the year 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The following line graph illustrates the step-up in the populace of
UK
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the UK
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from 1971 to 2006 and
prediction
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the prediction
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until 2023. The pie chart displays the population of dissimilar nationalities in the UK in the year 2006.
Overall
, the index of Spain and Greece increased slightly,
meanwhile
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France had gradual decreases and only Norway had rapid
changes
. Examining the line graph, we can observe some
changes
. Greece had 1
tons
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ton
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of CO2 emissions per person in 1971 but every year
this
index slightly increased until 2005
then
had no
changes
. Spain had a bigger coefficient than Greece it was 4
tons
, from 1971 until 1985 the index of Spain went up. After 1985 it didn’t have much change. The average CO2 emissions per person in Norway had increased by 10
tons
but
then
went down with a result of 5,5
tons
by 2015. France
comparing
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compared
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to Norway didn’t have that much of
changes
, they had 11,5
tons
in 1971, every year the CO2 emissions gradually decreased and by 2015 went down to 8
tons
.
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