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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The data provides information about
export
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earnings
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 products in different categories in 2015 and 2016 and the percentage changes in values of each product during a year.
Overall
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, the size of
export
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earnings
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 increased in Petroleum, Engineered,Agricultural products and textiles, in which the proportion of
export
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 gross was higher.
However
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, the sum of gems and jewellery experienced a decline over the period.
It is clear that
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 three goods significant
increase
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 in
export
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earnings
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 during the year. By far, the largest sum of
earnings
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 taken by Petroleum and engineered products was more than 60
billion
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 in 2016.
On the other hand
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,it was textiles goods that showed the highest rate of growth almost 7
billion
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 in a year period.Agricultural imports rocked slowly and earned above 30
billion
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 in 2016.
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, the sum of gems and jewellery fall from approximately 42
billion
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 to above 40
billion
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 respectively. The key feature that emerges from the table is that the percentage of textiles
were
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 higher (15.24%) than other imports.
In contrast
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, gems and jewellery dropped to 5.18%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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