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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
 line charts depict goods that New Zealand imported from
Australia
 and
Japan
, between 1994 and 2004, showing the figures
by
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 each year. Both graphs are very similar, so it is possible to compare the data of international commerce between the
two
 countries.
Overall
,
imports
 from
Australia
 were bigger
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period and much higher
in
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at
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 the end,
comparing
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compared
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 to
Japan
.
On the other hand
,
imports
 from
Japan
 finished slightly lower than they started. The peak of
purchase
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purchases
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 from
Australia
 was in 2004 reaching 8000
new zealand
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New Zealand
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 dollars,
wheres
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whereas
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 the peak of
imports
 from
Japan
 was in 1997, getting more than NZ$ 6000. In
Australia
's chart
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there was
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was
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were
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 four peaks,
while
 in
the
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Japan
's chart
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there was
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was
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were
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 only
two
 peaks. To
summ
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sum
 up, there was a clear fluctuation in all
period
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periods
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 of
two
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the two
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 line graphs, showing that
imports
change
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changed
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 a lot over
the
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apply
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time in the trade
of
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between
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 these nations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, australia, japan, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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