The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages.

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages.
This
graph shows how the
Population
Birth
rate
and
death
rate
have changed between the
years
1940 and 2020 in Scotland. We can see that
birth
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the birth
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rate
has decreased exponentially and dropped almost 2% in 80
years
.
Death
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The death
show examples
rate
lowered
1
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by 1
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% in 20
years
,
stabalized
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stabilized
stabilised
for 50
years
, and in 2020 Grew almost 5% it
also
shows a
stopagge
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stoppage
storage
in
Population
growth
betwee
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between
the
years
2000 and 2010. From
this
information
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information,
show examples
we can tell that these three variables are
conected
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connected
,
Due to
the fact, that if the
Birth
Rate
decreases,
population
growth will
also
lower, and
death
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the death
show examples
rate
will increase because the elderly will start to pass away and with no
increse
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increase
in
birth
rate
,
death
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the death
show examples
rate
will increase. After,
analizing
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analysing
the spike in 1955, we can determine that
Birth
date and
population
rate
depend
from
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on
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each other, and have almost
and
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apply
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identical
variable
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variables
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throughout the
years
1940 and 2020. The Stabilization of the
death
rate
seems weird because both other variables lowered it was probably the variable adjusting to the changes in the
population
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, rate, death, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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