The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie charts highlight data about several types of energy production which were consumed in 1995 and 2005 in France. Looking from an
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perspective, it can be clearly seen that the consumption of various kinds of energy saw a significant increase,
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the reverse was true for petroleum. The interesting point is that coal and gas made up approximately
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half of the total proportion. As regards gas which was the highest proportion in the given period, it accounted for 29.63% and 30.31%, in 1995 and 2005 respectively. Coal made up 29.80% in 1995, which was a little bit lower than that in 2005 (30.93%). As for petroleum, it was nearly a third in 1995 but in 2005, it dropped to 19.55%.
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, nuclear which was ranked fourth made up just 6.40% in 1995,
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it rose to 10.10% in 2005.
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accounted for the least during a decade was the smallest percentage of 4.90 in 1990 and 9.10 in 2005.
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