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Band 4

You ordered an item from an online store and it has arrived damaged. Write a letter to the retailer to comlain. In the letter. -Explain why you are unhappy. -Request a refound. -Make arrangements to return The damaged item.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or Madam I
to order
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ordered
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product
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a product
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Phone
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an
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from an
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 online store and it
is come
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came
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 to arrive me
to
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in
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 injury
at
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apply
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condition. I The goal
comlain
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complain
 that
phone
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 was a very unsatisfactory
Phone
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. I am Setora Saydullayeva
l
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 advantage a lot thing
this
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from
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form
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 of
Phone
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espically
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especially
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since l
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since l
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l
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 use a lot from of Internet and
l
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 could not various reports after
then
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 from of Internet, again
l
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 see
a
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apply
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performance
various
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apply
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broadcasts
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broadcast
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broadcasts
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on
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at
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on
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Phone
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. I
do
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am
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 not
be
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satisfied
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this
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with this
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from
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apply
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Phone
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 because it does not work well
this
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Phone
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 so
l
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 succour
me
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apply
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to
this
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of
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apply
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Phone
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. I can not use
this
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Phone
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 anymore,
this
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Phone
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 did not make me comfortable, so
l
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 could not use anything or to me please return The money, or it is The act of giving
this
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of
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apply
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Phone
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. It could not be to advantage
this
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from
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form
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 of
Phone
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 and it
break
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breaks
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this
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 of
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Phone
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the Phone
a Phone
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 movie screen. So
l
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 do not
agree
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agree on
agree to
agree with
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 me to
from
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form
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 of
Phone
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. Yours faithfully, Setora Saydullayeva

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Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas more clearly. Start with a short introduction, follow with a paragraph for each of the points needed (unhappiness explanation, refund request, return arrangements) and finish with a respectful closing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph discusses a single idea to keep your letter easy to follow. This will greatly improve the reader's understanding and the overall flow of your writing.
Task Achievement
Try to directly address the tasks given in the prompt. Clearly state the problem with the phone, specifically ask for a refund, and propose how you intend to return the damaged item. Being direct and to the point is crucial for Task Achievement.
Task Achievement
Use a more formal and polite tone appropriate for writing to a retailer. Avoid overly casual language and ensure to use polite requests and expressions of dissatisfaction.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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