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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of people who
live
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lived
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 in India and China between 2002
to
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and to
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 nowadays with expectations for
increasing
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to
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by
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 2050. From an
overall
 perspective, it is noticeable that the population of India
was
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experienced
a
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great growth from the beginning to the end of the selected
periode
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period
;
whereas
, the amount
number
 of residents in China was projected
a
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to a
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slow decline.
In
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On
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 the one hand, India’s population at the starting point
was
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accounted for 1,000
billions
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billion
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 in 2000 and it increased sharply until it
expects
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is expected
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 to reach
approxiemately
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approximately
 1450
billions
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billion
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 in 2030.
This
 point is expected to face the same
number
 of China’s population in the same year.
Moreover
, it is projected to reach about 1,600
billions
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billion
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 in 2050.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the rate
a
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apply
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number
 of
human
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humans
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 who lived in China was forecasted to be around 1250 in 2000.
In addition
, it will reach about 1,400 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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