The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information on the percentage of
water
consumption for various reasons in 6 continents scattered over the world. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the vast majority of
water
belong
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to agricultural purposes in most areas, which is followed by
industial
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industrial
use and
lastly
, domestic use. It can be seen that over 70% to 88% of aquatic uses is distributed to
argicultural
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agricultural
purposes in South America, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
. Given only 7% to 9%, domestic uses are settled as the 2nd rank for Africa and Central
Asia
.
In contrast
, South East
Asia
's
second biggest
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consumption falls to
industrial
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the industrial
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aspect, dominating 12%.
Conversely
, for 48% and 53%
on
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industrial
usages
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, North America and Europe respectively rank as champion and 1st runner-up for the immense
water
consumption.
Additionally
, both areas share
argricultural
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an agricultural
aspect as the second majority of
water
usage, with 39% and 32% uses.
Lastly
, with
solely
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only
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13 to 15%, both continents spend the least
water
allocation on domestic contexts.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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