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the line graph give information about acid rain emmissions in uk between 1990 to 2007 summarise this figure

the line graph give information about acid rain emmissions in uk between 1990 to 2007 summarise this figure
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compars
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compares
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 the amount of
acidgas
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acid gas
acids
emmissions
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emissions
from different sources including transport and communication, energy and water supplies, other industries and domestic origins between the years 1991 and 2007 in
United
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 Kingdom.
overall
,
it is clear that
domestic
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the domestic
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source
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sources
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 of gas
emmission
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emission
emissions
acompanied
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accompanied
companies
 less than industrial sources.
As the
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 recorded information in
this
 part demonstrated an almost steady pattern
around
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of around
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 0.5
million
tonnes
 during the recording time with a
slightly decreased
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 after around the year 2000. The
emmissions
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emissions
 from transport and communication consisted
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of less
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 than 1
million
tonnes
 and approximately remain stable
around
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untill
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until
 the midpoint of
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, afterwards
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from
 about 2000 it slightly increased and
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to
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1
million
tonnes
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while
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 dipped to
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almost origin
tonnes
 from 2004 to the end.
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remain
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 sources experienced
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more
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a more
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 variable pattern during the whole
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year
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years
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,
whereas
, electricity,gas and water supplies
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were
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was
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were
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 at the
highestpoint
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highest point
 of
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emissions
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emission
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emissions
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 above 3
million
tonnes
 and
despit
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despite
a
of
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sharp
declin
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decline
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, it had
emmitted
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emitted
 the most part of CO2
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until
aroun
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around
 1997
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which
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reached under 1.5 and have been
coutinued
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continued
deceasingly
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decreasingly
unceasingly
 with a less slop to hit the lower amount
at the end
 in 2007.the next big share of
emmissions
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emissions
were
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 produced by other industries and as
it
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is
obviouse
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obvious
 in
results
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the results
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 report it poses the biggest part of
emmission
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emission
 yet in 2007.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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