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The line graph illustrates the amount of electricity produced in France from 1980 to 2010. Overall, electricity production from nuclear power was highest, whereas the production of electricity from renewable energy was lowest.

The line graph illustrates the amount of electricity produced in France from 1980 to 2010. Overall, electricity production from nuclear power was highest, whereas the production of electricity from renewable energy was lowest.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of
electricity
 produced in France from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
,
electricity
production
 from nuclear power was highest,
whereas
 the
production
 of
electricity
 from renewable
energy
 was lowest. In 1980, about 120
TW-h
 of
electricity
 was produced from thermal power. In the same year, nuclear and hydroelectric
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 produced about 75
TW-h
 of
electricity
. Renewable
energy
 provided a negligible amount. One year later, nuclear
energy
 overtook thermal
energy
 as the primary source of
electricity
. From 1980 to 2005, the amount of
electricity
 produced from nuclear
energy
 increased constantly and reached a peak of around 430
TW-h
.
By contrast
, the figures for thermal
energy
 decreased
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 50
TW-h
 in 1985 and remained unchanged for the rest of the period. The
production
 of
electricity
 from hydroelectric power remained relatively stable at around 50
TW-h
 and 80
TW-h
 over a 32-year period.
Electricity
production
 produced from renewable
energy
 grew slightly during the
last
 7 years.
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