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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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First for
graduates
students
 the most relevant is
Further
 study
they
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are 29.665
people
 in front of the
postgraduates
 has the same behaviour with 2.725
people
then
, the second one more relevant in both charts is the part-time
work
 for
graduates
students
 with 17.735
people
 and for
postgraduates
studens
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students
 are 2.535
people
, the third relevant is unemployment for both charts for
graduates
 with 16.235 and
postgraduates
 are 1.625
people
 and the
last
 is voluntary
work
 for
graduates
 are 3.500 and
postgraduates
 are 345
people
. Those charts have the same behaviour in each kind of
work
, in
UK
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the UK
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at
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in
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 2008
students
 were very
interest
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interested
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 in
have
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having
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 more knowledge, and
also
 the
cuantity
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quantity
 of
people
 in postgraduate
students
 that have "part-time
work
" and "
further
 study" is close. That analysis can't be done for
graduates
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graduate
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students
 where the number of
students
are
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is
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 really
diferrent
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different
.
To conclude
 is important to mention that in
postgraduate
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the postgraduate
a postgraduate
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 chart the data is really small
compare
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compared
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 to the
graduates
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graduate
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students
 chart.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, students, people, postgraduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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