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Write an email to the hotel manager in about 150–200 words. Your email should do the following things: Describe your unpleasant experience. Ask the manager to repay you in some way. Suggest how things could be improved.

#email #hotel #manager
Dear Mr. John, I am writing
this
 letter to express my frustration over the terrible
experienced
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while
 staying at the Blue
Hotel
.
This
 is the first time, I have
planed
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 something for my family and decided to go to Cox's Bazar to enjoy a family tour.
However
, I heard about a plethora of things about your
hotel
 on the internet. As it is a newly built
hotel
, I wanted to explore the new infrastructure of the
hotel
.
However
, we stayed there almost three days and breakfasts were included in the fees. When we reached there, I
had
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found out that we had
given
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 a different suite, which was fine with us. After that, when we went to have our breakfast and found out that most of the foods were
cheaper
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 quality and the menu
is
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 totally different from our expectations. Apart from that, the cleanliness of our suite was not satisfying and the staff only cleaned it one time during our staying.
Overall
, we were really disappointed with
services
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 that had been
provide
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providing
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 to us and seeking your attention in
this
regards
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.
Hence
,
50
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a 50
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% refund from our total bill will be appreciated. I am leaving the date of our arrival and
also
 my number
in
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at
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 your convenience. Feel free to contact
with
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me, if you need any
further
 information. Yours faithfully, Lisa Akter
Submitted by Lisa Bhuiyan on

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structure
Make sure to structure your email clearly with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Introducing your purpose in the opening line, explaining your concerns in the body, and summarizing your requests in the closing would enhance your email's logical structure.
detail
For a better response, be specific about your negative experiences and state your expectations clearly. For example, describe what aspects of the food and cleanliness were below standard and explain clearly how you expect to be compensated.
cohesion
Use a range of linking words to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will help in improving the overall flow and readability of your email.
accuracy
Revise for grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Using varied sentence structures and a wider range of vocabulary can help convey your message more effectively.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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