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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates how many
books
lent
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 in four months from
June
 to
September
 and different four village libraries over the period of 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that Sutton Wood village
library
 had fluctuation
while
 Ryeslip
library
 decreased from given first
month
 to till end
month
. In detail, in Sutton wood,
on
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June
month
 there was lent approximately 250
books
than
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then
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 it grew slightly and reached around 275
books
, surprisingly, there was a drastic drop
on
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 August, at loo
books
,
thereafter
,
library
 borrowed
books
were
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increased significantly, which was exactly 300
books
 on
September
.
In contrast
, Ryeslip Village
library
was
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stood at 300
books
in
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 the beginning of the
month
along with
this
 was the highest number of borrowed
books
 than any other
villages
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village
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, from
June
 to
September
, there was a drastic decrease and it was reached
on
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at
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 the end of the
month
, at almost 175
books
.
On the Contrary
, West Eaton and Chruch Mount libraries had the
Same
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same
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 number of lent
books
on
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June
, at 50
books
.
Similarly
, these both had grown slightly between July to
September
,
as well as
, these both
was
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touched the same line
on
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September
, which accounts for 150
books
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, june, september, library, month with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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