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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information about the proportion of teaching staff based on gender across big universities in 2012 is depicted by the given bar graph.
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, the most striking feature of
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 is that
males
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 were leading the four major fields, particularly engineering,
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 females majorly were leaders in the arts and education departments. Taking a cursory glance, it can be clearly manifested that females were ahead of
males
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 in arts with a significant difference of 16 % where
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 accounts for 58% and
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 42%.
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the
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contrast,
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 in
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the business
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 department were exactly the twice
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female teaching staff with
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a percentage
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around
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 63%. In medicine, both
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genders were comparably equal at around 45% respectively. Moving to
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 details, law and science were shown similar trends, where nearly 60% were involved in teaching and approximately 40%
faculty
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of faculty
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 members were women.
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, in Engineering,
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 were leading all the categories and stood at just above 80%
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 in education,
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the majority
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 of teachers were females and settled at just under 80%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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