The bar chart gives us the information about the life expectancy in Japan, United States, Korea, and Indonesia and the table shows us the change in the life expectancy between 1953 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figures depict
life
Correct article usage
the life
expectancy
in
of people who Change preposition
apply
born
in 2008 and Add a missing verb
were born
growth
trend between 1953 and 2008. Correct article usage
the growth
Overall
, first
chart Change the article
the first
illustrate
that Japan is the highest, and Change the verb form
illustrates
Indonesia
at the lowest position. Meanwhile Indonesia
Change noun form
Indonesia's
growth
number
of life
expectancy
in
first position.
In general, Add a missing verb
is in
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
life
expectancy
was in range
from 70 to almost 82 Add an article
the range
a range
years
old Correct word choice
as depict
depict
Wrong verb form
depicted
from
the chart. Japan has raised the most prominent Change preposition
in
number
with reach
Correct article usage
a reach
almost
82 Change preposition
of almost
years
. In contrast
, Indonesia
in
Add a missing verb
is in
deteriorate
condition which Change the verb form
deteriorating
is
raised at least Verb problem
has
with
70 Change preposition
apply
years
. However
, Korea and USA
Correct article usage
the USA
was
in Change the verb form
were
middle
Add an article
the middle
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
reached
between 75 to 80 Wrong verb form
reaching
years
.
Although
Indonesia
in 2008 was the lowest country for life
expectancy
, the tables implied that Indonesia
dominated growth
of Add an article
the growth
life
expectancy
with +15,7 years
compared in
1953. Change preposition
to
Furthermore
, United
Correct article usage
the United
states
Capitalize word
States
growth
+3
Add a missing verb
is +3
years
which is implied to be the lowest and higher +0,5
Change preposition
than +0,5
years
compared with Japan. However
, Korea was raised +12,5
Change preposition
by +12,5
years
to be nearest
Change the article
the nearest
number
with
Change preposition
to
Indonesia
Change noun form
Indonesia's
growth
life
expectancy
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, growth, indonesia, number, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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