The chart gives information about Australian men’s and women’s regular physical activity in 2010, number of males and females and average between age groups. Figures are given for six categories from 15-24 to 65 and over years old.
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The chart gives information about Australian men’s and women’s regular physical activity in 2010,
number
of males and females and Correct article usage
the number
average
between age groups. Figures are given for six categories from 15-24 to 65 and over years old.
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chart
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the chart
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women
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