You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter: Describe the problem the new employee has caused Explain how other employees about the new employee's conduct Say how you expect HR manager to address the situation.
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing in order to complain about a recently hired employee in our workplace. I have been working here for a long time
on the contrary
I am
never felt Verb problem
have
Change preposition
apply
like
disappointed. He does not complete the assigned work Change preposition
apply
in
full time and Change preposition
apply
also
he comes to work late.
In addition
, not only me,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
other jobholders were upset with him,
because his
group did not finish the program Remove the comma
apply
as a result
of him. That is
why, this
group lag behind other part
of the company. Change the wording
another part
other parts
Also
, i
am afraid that these complaints will cause arguing.
I would be grateful if you could solve Change the capitalization
I
this
issue,
because it is not mine, it is our problem. Instance, Remove the comma
apply
last
month, shares of company
Correct article usage
the company
decrease
and Wrong verb form
decreased
head
of the company can not look at it like that
I look forward to Correct article usage
the head
reply
and I expect that you will most likely fire Correct pronoun usage
your reply
this
employee.
Yours faithfully,
JurabekSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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task achievement
For task achievement, make sure to address each point of the task clearly and separately. Your letter addressed the problem, other employees’ views, and the expected action from the HR manager. However, the specificity and clarity of these points could be enhanced. For instance, detailing the nature of the work problems and offering concrete suggestions for how the HR manager can address the situation beyond just firing the employee could make your response more complete.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, organize your ideas more logically. Your letter follows a basic structure but can benefit from clearer transitions between topics. For example, introducing each paragraph with a topic sentence can help guide the reader through your points more smoothly. Also, paying attention to the flow between sentences will improve readability. Avoid jumping abruptly from one idea to another.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing in the letter are done appropriately according to the formal requirements. Ensure to maintain this formal tone throughout your letter for consistency.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite