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The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.

The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.
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The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US,
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 and India, from 1990 to 2012.
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,
China
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 witnessed a dramatic rise in the percentage of Australian imports throughout the period.
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, except
India
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for India
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, the other countries’ data slightly decreased. Even though
China
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 began with a poor
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 in 1990, which was around 3%, it ultimately ended up at the highest rank amongst the four nations by 2012 with the recorded
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 being over 25%. It was India that had the same start as
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, at roughly 2%.
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, unlike
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, its
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 did not rise until 2000 and it was
also
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 the country that possessed the lowest record
at the end
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 of the period. As regards Japan and The US, in 1990, their proportion
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 Australian imports was fairly high, which was over 25% and 10% respectively. Having said that, both of them experienced a moderate decline right after that. After the year 1995,
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 the data of Japan remained nearly unchanged at under 20%, that
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 of The US insignificantly fluctuated before ending up at around 7% in 2012.

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