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You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisa5on. Write a le9er to the manager of the organisa5on where you are going to do work experience. In your le=er • thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience • explain what you hope to learn from the work experience • ask some ques5ons about the work experience you are going to do

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Dear Mr Brown, I am very happy and excited that I am going to work experience at CNN 03
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 and I am very grateful to you,
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 Brown, for giving me
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I hope that my
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cooperation
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 and help the growth of the
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. I
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 to communicaDon in television and I love to know some skills like how can I
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 with eyes and body (body language and contact eyes) or how can I give different
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 of news to people with behavioral psychology
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I
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team work
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 and manage
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 I hope to develop my skills
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solve problems and
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 with
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viewer
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. I have some offers for some
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organization
 to improve and grow up and if you
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and I spirit of research
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 is possible you can count
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. I am available for
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 at your convenience. Yours faithfully, Ali Esmaeili
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Coherence and Cohesion
Pay close attention to the structure of your letter. Start by introducing yourself and explain your reason for writing. The middle paragraphs should address each bullet point from the task specifically—one paragraph for thanking and explaining the opportunity, another for what you hope to learn, and a third for asking questions about the experience.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clearly identify each section of your letter. Use paragraphs effectively to separate your ideas, and ensure that each paragraph deals with a single idea. Make sure to have a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing each task bullet point, and a closing statement.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task. Make sure to thank the manager, explain what you hope to learn clearly and in detail, and ask specific, relevant questions about your upcoming work experience.
Task Achievement
Work on the clarity and precision of your language. Avoid vague statements and instead provide specific examples and detailed explanations of what you hope to gain from the work experience. This will help make your letter more comprehensive and engaging.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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