The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the data about how much money
made
from different kinds of fields,namely,Add a missing verb
was made
finance
,transportation,construction,manufacturing and hospitality in 2009 measured in pounds in 2009.
Overall
,what stands out from the chart is that most of the money was earned from finance
,whereas
the least was from hospitality.
Looking into detail,maximum
Add an article
the maximum
salary
for finance
was 8850 pounds,while
the minimum was just 1600 pounds.Next,maximum
Add an article
the maximum
a maximum
salary
of
transportation accounted for 4580 and with Change preposition
for
significant
difference minimum Correct article usage
a significant
salary
made up 843.Utmost
Correct word choice
The highest
salary
for both construction and manufacturing was nearly the same,with 3100 and 3500 and with a slight difference 790 and 930 for minimum salary
respectively.
With regard to the average salaries,construction and hospitality constituted 1945 and 1895 respectively,whilst finance
,again,ranked first with 5225.Ultimately,mean
Correct article usage
the mean
salary
for transportation accounted for 2712,whereas
that of manufacturing was 2215.Submitted by writingbhos on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words finance, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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