The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below illustrates the data about how much money

made

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was made

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from different kinds of fields,namely,

finance

,transportation,construction,manufacturing and hospitality in 2009 measured in pounds in 2009.

Overall

,what stands out from the chart is that most of the money was earned from

finance

whereas

the least was from hospitality. Looking into detail,

maximum

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the maximum

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salary

for

finance

was 8850 pounds,

while

the minimum was just 1600 pounds.Next,

maximum

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the maximum

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salary

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for

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transportation accounted for 4580 and with

significant

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a significant

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difference minimum

salary

made up 843.

Utmost

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The highest

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salary

for both construction and manufacturing was nearly the same,with 3100 and 3500 and with a slight difference 790 and 930 for minimum

salary

respectively. With regard to the average salaries,construction and hospitality constituted 1945 and 1895 respectively,whilst

finance

,again,ranked first with 5225.Ultimately,

mean

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the mean

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salary

for transportation accounted for 2712,

whereas

that of manufacturing was 2215.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words finance, salary with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

129 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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