The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below illustrates the data about how much money
made
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from different kinds of fields,namely,
finance
,transportation,construction,manufacturing and hospitality in 2009 measured in pounds in 2009.
Overall
,what stands out from the chart is that most of the money was earned from
finance
,
whereas
the least was from hospitality. Looking into detail,
maximum
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the maximum
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salary
for
finance
was 8850 pounds,
while
the minimum was just 1600 pounds.Next,
maximum
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the maximum
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salary
of
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for
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transportation accounted for 4580 and with
significant
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difference minimum
salary
made up 843.
Utmost
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The highest
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salary
for both construction and manufacturing was nearly the same,with 3100 and 3500 and with a slight difference 790 and 930 for minimum
salary
respectively. With regard to the average salaries,construction and hospitality constituted 1945 and 1895 respectively,whilst
finance
,again,ranked first with 5225.Ultimately,
mean
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salary
for transportation accounted for 2712,
whereas
that of manufacturing was 2215.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words finance, salary with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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