The most important factor in job satisfaction is salary To What extend do you agree or disagree?

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job
with
a
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good pay plays a role
for
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job
satisfaction.
Nevertheless
is not the most important element. I
am totally disagree
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and in
this
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I will explore various dimensions of the issue and provide
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of the extent. First of
all
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we build our
life
based on happiness unfortunately happiness can not buy. But thanks to science
that
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we have knowledge about which hormones help us to be happy called dopamine. Our frontal brain
generate
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this
hormone based on our
life style
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lifestyle
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and
action
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actions
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such
as a reward. That’s why our adrenaline and being well situation are higher after
do
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sports,
exercise
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and exercise
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. Even though we have a good
salary
but
not
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are not
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content
about
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our
job
it will
effect
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affect
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us negatively.
For
example
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I was working
an
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as an
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expat in China with a good employee package but I quit my
job
because of not satisfied
about
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what I
were
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doing in
company
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the company
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.
Hence
, if people are not happy regarding their occupation in
work place
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the workplace
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salary
will not help them to be satisfied. Another reason why I disagree
that
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personal improvement is very important in our
life
. Imagine you are doing
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descent
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routine
job
everyday
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and can not build new skills
enhance
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your vision, beyond the advancement of new technologies
eventhough
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even though
at the end
of the month
get
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a nice payment from the company employee will stuck that
job
and
salary
will not help for
further
life
development. People who
works
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in
factory
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a factory
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and just
checking
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same
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part quality over and over
I do not
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feel that they can continue like
this
until get retire. In
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I will argue that personal satisfaction being
a
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well and loving what you are doing in
company
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the company
a company
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are much more important than the
salary
.
Salary
is not the most important part
in
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of
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our
job
.
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