The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The charts demonstrate the proportion of
time
consumed by workers on various activities in one country between 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, according
to
the pie charts in both years , show Change preposition
apply
a
largest percentage Change the article
the
in
Change preposition
for
the
relaxing hours at home and working hours.Correct article usage
apply
In contrast
, lowest
level Add an article
the lowest
in
sleeping and spending Correct your spelling
is
time
with family or friends.
Regarding the pie charts in 1958 and 2008, the work represents the highest percentage (33% and 42%) , respectively . This
is followed by sleeping forms ( 32% and 25%).
While
,
the Remove the comma
apply
time
spent with family or friends demonstrated 19% in 1958 compared to 2008 was dramatically decreased to only 6%.
Similarly
, the time
of chill at home in 1958 was 8% whereas
in 2008 rose sharply to 13%.
Moreover
, spent
Wrong verb form
spending
time
on other activities such
as travel to work slightly rise
from 2% in 1958 to 8% in 2008.
Wrong verb form
rose
In addition
, the playing sports was no significant change between 1958 and 2008.Submitted by jumanh114 on
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