The chart and graph show the categories of the workforce in London and the unemployment rate within three groups. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and line graph
depicts
the Correct subject-verb agreement
depict
figure
for three different types in London and the unemployment percentage of selected groups from 1993 to 2003.
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figures
Overall
, half people
Correct article usage
the people
work
in London Correct pronoun usage
who work
were
locals, Wrong verb form
are
while
very few people
came
from Wrong verb form
come
English
-speaking countries. Although
,
the unemployment rate of all groups dropped after a decade, folks who spoke Remove the comma
apply
English
but were not native Londoners
were in highly rate of losing their jobs and the fewest Non-
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non-English-speaking
English
-speaking people
were fired in the beginning.
Looking at the graph in more detail, there were 8% Change preposition
of employee
employee
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employees
whose
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who were
English
was
fluent Unnecessary verb
apply
losing
their work, socially, there Wrong verb form
lost
were
only differing Correct subject-verb agreement
was
by
1% between the locals and Change preposition
of
people
whose mother tongue was not English
, with 4% and 3%, respectively. About four years later, only figures for native Londoners
rose to 5%, while
the others were diminished to around 7% and 2.4%. In the last
year, all categories plummeted to 3%, 2% and 1%, and there was the same ranking, which was English
-speaking people
leading the way, following
by native Wrong verb form
followed
Londoners
and Non-English
-speaking people
.
It is clear that
in London
employment market, employers preferred to recruit native Correct article usage
the London
Londoners
, which accounted for 50%, incredibly, for those whose countries adopted English
was
their prior language were extremely lower than Correct your spelling
as
people
who were not English
speaking, with 8% and 42%.Submitted by Joanna
on
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