The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors ina particular country from 1978 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
movie goers
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moviegoers
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among four
age
groups
ina
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in a
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particular nation. A cursory glance at the graph is enough to make it clear that
the
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apply
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14 to
24 year olds
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24-year-olds
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were the
most fond
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fondest
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of
cinema
throughout the given period of three decades beginning
1978
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in 1978
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. From 1978 to 1988, the percentage of
cinema
attenders
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attendees
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fell from 90, 80, 60 and 40 to 75, 60, 40,
ans
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and
20, among the 14-24, 25-34, 35-49 and the 50+
age
groups
repectively
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respectively
. The next decade saw an increase in the percentage of
cinema
attendence
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attendance
in all
age
groups
.
However
, the next five years after that saw stability in the
cinema
attendance in all
age
groups
.
However
, the next five years after that saw stability in the
cinema
attendance in all
age
groups
. From 2003 to 2008, the popularity of
cinema
decreased in all
age
groups
except for the over 50s, who started going to the
cinema
in more numbers.
Overall
,
it is clear that
going to the
cinema
was more popular among the younger
age
groups
and the trends were almost similar throughout, except for the 50 plus
age
group, after 2003, when their percentage of
cinema
attendance increased,
whereas
that of all other
age
groups
decreased.
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