The chart below shows the amount of time that people in two age group speny on different activities in the US. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of time that people in two age group speny on different activities in the US.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar
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graph
below gives information about the time
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spent by people on some different
activities
in two age groups
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the US.
It is clear that
there were two trends in six types of
activities
.
Whereas
watching TV, reading and relaxing/thinking were done more in
ages
75 and over, in
ages
15-19, the opposite pattern
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occured
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occurred
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the
activities
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remain
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.
To begin
with, watching TV, reading and relaxing/thinking, the figures
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ages
75 and over in watching TV was 4.5 hours per day, which
more
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half
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than
ages
15-19 at 25 in the US.
The
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similar pattern was
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shown
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in reading and
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reading
realising
/ thinking when a day of
ages
75 and over
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accounted for 2
activities
with 1
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and 30 minutes respectively,
while
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in
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ages
15-19 was fewer
then
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1 hour.
By
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was happened in three daily
activities
. In socializing/communicating, the hours
in
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per day of
ages
15-19 just was slightly more than
ages
75 and over, both playing games/ computer use for leisure and sports/exercise and
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recreation
reaction
in
ages
15-19 were more than double remaining
ages
75 and over.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, ages with synonyms.
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